Writing Sample Grades

The following grades are from four sample writings we had to grade for English 101. We had to look at Clarity of Purpose, Quality of Thought, Effective Organization of Content, Use of Sources, Language and Style, and Grammar and Mechanics on each paper. Now, granted, I am not the expert! But here's what I thought (after reading them 3 times each!).


Paper #1

"Foreign Athletic Limits"
Grade: D
Explanation: If this is the final paper, then it's a D. It reads more like a rough draft. Sentences are rough and inconsistent. They do not flow nicely, or in a well organized pattern. Sources are not cited well. It has some misspelled words and incorrect punctuations. The paper is on the right path, but not finished.

Paper #2

"Online College vs. High School College"
Grade: B
Explanation: The thesis was insightful. The body paragraphs were fairly organized. The paper made strong points, but could have explained more about the online college part. The conclusion could have been stronger. It had a few misspelled words and incorrect punctuations. Not bad, overall.

Paper #3

"Predisposed to Divorce"
Grade: A
Explanation: I think the thesis, body paragraphs, and conclusion were all good! The sources were well cited throughout the whole paper. Maybe a few grammatical errors, but it was really a good paper, nice read.


Paper #4

"NAACP Case Against Gun Manufacturers"
Grade: B+
Explanation: It is right on the edge of an A for me. It had some words spelled wrong, some punctuation errors. It had some strong agruments, but the work wasn't cited well enough. A few more changes and this is a great paper.

Movado

The art of Movado is the art of time. My advertising product comes from a magazine called W. It has a watch advertised called Movado. I personally own a Movado. This magazine targets women starting in the middle age bracket of 20 and going up, in the middle to upper class, people who can afford more expensive things. W has lots of advertisements for upper scale products like Louis Vuitton, Prada, Chanel, Mercedes, to name a few. In the ad of W, an international actress, named Mia Maestro, is on the top half of the page. MOVADO is spelled out in the center of the page with white block letters. Under this, in smaller print, it states "THE ART OF DESIGN", again in white. The bottom of the ad has the picture of a white Movado, on it's side. The band has a modern design of small, white circles, trimmed in white gold, two by two linked in a row. The face of the watch is white, while the white gold edge of the watch is laced with diamonds. Movado has a distinct face of only having a small circle (sometimes a single diamond) to depict the 12 o'clock hour, a hour hand and a minute hand, and a very small trademark on the bottom area. Nothing else is on the face of the watch. The background of the ad is black. The watch is larger in scale than the actress, which has your eye going to the watch quicker. I believe the ad is trying to attract people who want to be associated with sophistication, eloquence, and style.